I use a lot of time on tis one just figuring how to get things right witht he composition. I tried to do something with the comments I got on the last one. Say what you think guys...
Awesome again. Still, I like the art a lot more than the graphic design.
I spent a few minutes messing with it:
I got rid of the color,
pumped the levels on the logo to b+w, to make it harder,
lowered the logo it a bit, added a white stroke around it
put the other text on the edge of the frame, with a little ink and a white border
I also played with some bg colors, but ended up liking b+w best
Thanks man for the stars and the comments, yeah this looks nice too.
I like what you did with position of the title and the subtext, it looks good in the composition.
Can you give me some time to explain why you chose these changes,
I am a guy that likes to know how things work and why things are done in a certain way.
Just I think it's a bit unusual to put the subtext over the title, dunno.
Hmm, maybe I am just stuck with making compositions geometric.
There are two triangles in the bottom half and the top half is a rectangle.
To give you an impression of how long I was fussing with this thing:
I was working at it for an hour when my friends asked if I wanted to play RISK with them,
after they finished I was still working on it and continued for a few more hours.
I got my own fully adjustable 80x150 drawing table at work now,
I like big desks, I need big desks, I am over 1.90 tall.
I drained the color, to make the sky less of the focal point. I wanted the logo and art to stand out, so I moved the subtext off it, and made the line around the title, to make it pop out. I figured a bar at the top would frame it nicely, and make room for the subtext. I'm not sure if that's kosher comic layout, it's just what I felt like doing.
Making a line around the title does make it pop out, and with that I think there is more of an balance in the whole composition.
The nextr thing I would want to do to this sketch is to make the eagle better and make a more smudged streaked background behind the title, continuing the lines on the mountains. Using the wet edges thingy. I'm not sure how it will turn out or if it will make the composition more balanced. Neither do I know if I will actually do it. Then a third thing is to put color on the artwork on the lower half.
It's not meant to be a comic, but rather a book in a series of culural war customs of different ethnic groups. I do see that I have a tendency to make things look like a comic. That is why I did not want to go BW, and should have done more with color.
Umm, nah, I don't need the PDF, but thanks anyway. And thanks again for you explaination (:
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